Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reasons for this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

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the
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youths
and young adults are getting involved in smoking
tobacco
is moving up and
this
is having negative
effects
on their
health
. Some of the problems I feel
is
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causing
this
is peer pressure, addiction and
also
because most of these things are cheap and can be easily gotten. I am
also
going to suggest some possible
solutions
which I feel if taken, can help in reducing the excess consumption of
tobacco
among young
people
. The issue of peer pressure in our nation can'
t
be ignored. While some
friends
has
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helped their
friends
in becoming great, others got them into bad habits like smoking. Most young
people
started smoking because of their
friends
. Some because they want to feel
among
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in the midst of their
friends
, they had to join them in smoking so as not to be separated. Most of our
youths
are now addicted to smoking. Some can'
t
even do without smoking
in
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a day. I came in contact with some young
people
and these boys have
this
habit that if they don'
t
smoke
tobacco
, they can'
t
eat anything. It's after they had smoked that they will start planning to eat food. Another reason I feel smoking is getting popular among
youths
is
because
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these
tobacco
products are very cheap to acquire. While some of them are expensive and are only gotten by
few
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a few
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rich
youths
, the most consumed tobaccos are cheap and are gotten by most
youths
who are into smoking. With the rates at which
the
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young
people
are smoking
tobacco
, I suggest there should be possible
solutions
to decrease
tobacco
taking among them and make it unpopular since the
youths
can'
t
be stopped permanently. Among my
solutions
, I will be suggesting
is
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an open
health
talk or seminar which will be strictly directed to smokers. If the government and
also
the
non governmental
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organizations can come together or individually to organize public
health
serminarsthat
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seminars that
will be directed to smokers, it will go a long way in reducing the intake of
tobacco
. Most
youths
keep smoking because they are ignorant about the
health
effects
this
can cause them.
Although
they keep seeing the
health
write
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on the
tobacco
boxes, some actually don'
t
know the real
effects
on their
health
. With the public
health
talk, they will be shown pictures and videos of those
which
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tobacco
smoking has affected.
Also
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there should be free medical tests for
youths
. Once these
test
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are
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done, some will discover that their
healths
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health
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are getting affected and it will make most of them
to
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stop while those that
knows
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about the
health
reports of
the
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smokers will
also
be scared to smoke so they
also
won'
t
suffer
samething
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something
same thing
. As smoking
tobacco
is increasing among our
youths
, which is having bad
effects
on their
healths
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health
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, the government and the
non governmental
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non-governmental
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organizations and
also
concerned individuals should take note of the reasons and possible
solutions
, so smoking can be reduced among them.
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