Many Offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishments. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle these problems.

A large number of
criminals
who serve their
first
prison
sentence, leave
prison
only to
reoffend
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re-offend
.
This
is mainly because of the lack of rehabilitation and difficulty finding regular employment once released. There are a number of solutions which should be implemented to deal with
criminals
who
reoffend
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re-offend
.
Firstly
, the reason
for
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most
first
-time
offenders
committing crimes again, once they have been released from
prison
, is due to the lack of rehabilitation whilst in
prison
.
In other words
,
offenders
are not given a chance to retrain and learn new skills for their future or develop a deeper understanding of correct moral behaviour and
instead
mix with other
criminals
, which only strengthens their criminal intentions.
Secondly
, repeat offending is
also
owing to the difficulty in finding employment after being released.
As a result
, many of them struggle financially which may lead them back to crime, regardless of the consequences. There are two effective solutions to the problem of repeat
offenders
. One way to tackle
this
is to ensure that all
criminals
entering
prison
are given the chance to retrain with useful skills which will hopefully ensure them a job after they have served their sentence.
By doing
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this
, it will help them reintegrate back into society and give them some means of supporting themselves financially. Another method of dealing with
criminals
who
reoffend
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re-offend
is to have more supervision and checks in place when they are back in society.
This
solution would hopefully prevent them from taking any chances and deter them from reoffending because they are being so closely watched. In conclusion, having training in
prison
and
also
close observation when
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offenders
are released
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effective in dealing with the issue. If governments implemented these solutions, crime figures would soon drop.
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