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People doing dangerous sport activities like scuba diving and bungee jumping, they should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people. Do you agree or disagree?

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No one can deny that new generations are interested
to
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 playing
hazard
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exercise
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such
 as scuba diving and bungee jumping,
however
, they could be responsible for their personal
life
 and safety workers should not take risks to save people. I disagree with
this
 notion, rescue workers
are take
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 their
duties
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 to save
youths
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youths'
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life
 in dangerous activities and they have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to save more people as possible in
hazards
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 situations I will
elaborated
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 in the looming paragraphs.
To begin
 with the disagreement, In
this
world
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 all types of activities are permitted by the international governments and many people
doing
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bad
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a bad
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 activity because they think their authority will
safe
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save
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 them but they have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to save their own
life
instead
 of others.`
To
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explain
exlapin
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explain
, Many nations
are improve
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 their
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facilities
facilites
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facilities
 for their foreign tourists because they allowed their public to take a ride to scuba diving because they like publicity for their
country
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 development and they hire a
hug
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 number of
rescue
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the rescue
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team
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 to save
these kind
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 of massive.
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, In Turkey scuba
ride
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rides
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 are well-known for their popularity
due to
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they like to
served
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 their
regions
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 advancement on a high level and each year over the globe they give jobs to save
others
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 individuals who take
this ride
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 because
sometime
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 they
out
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 of control
to
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 their machery system.
Furthermore
, It is important for all newcomers to learn safety skills because they should be responsible for their own
life
and
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it's an essential part of
life
 to learn
this kind
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these kinds
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 of
defense
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 techniques and it useful for
dangerous
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a dangerous
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time
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such
 as robbery and snatching.
In addition
, In
this
 digital technology is advanced all
self defence
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course
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courses
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 are available on the internet and it
good
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 to
listen
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this
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 skills because they have many benefits to save their own souls.
For instance
.
In
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German schools
are
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teach
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 their students how to save their
heart
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on
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a bad hours
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 because they understand
this
phenomenon
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 effects and
their
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 upcoming generations are strong for the help of
this
 contribution. In conclusion,
although
 dangerous sports exercise is good
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sometimes
somtimes
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sometimes
 and their safety volunteers
are take
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take
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risk
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the risk
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 to save
someone
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someone's
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life
 who enjoy
this
 age.
Moreover
, Every person
are
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 responsible for their soul due to they
also
 prepare for bad news before the incident.
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