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Space exploration is a waste of money. Agree or disagree?

#space #exploration #waste #money
Yes
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i
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 agree about that statement,
share
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sharing
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 as
information
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much information
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 as
a
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possible in scientific
research
 freely is good for the improvement of
the
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society
. Someone had said “
Information
 is the
powerful
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most powerful
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 weapon
in
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on
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 the planet”, from that quotes
i
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I
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 believed
information
 can bring some major improvement
for
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to
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society
. Because the more people can access the
research
 paper the more people can improve their
life
. The more people improve
their
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, the more
society
 can
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be improved
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improved
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improve
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. Meanwhile,
share
 as
information
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much information
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 as
a
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possible or we called it
education
.
Education
 become human
rights
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right
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 in
this
 age. Because of that, all
human
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humans
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 need to access
information
 about anything freely.
Education
 is basic
needs
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need
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 for
human
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a human
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being
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beings
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.
Next
,
share
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sharing
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 as
information
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much information
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 as
a
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possible is the key
of
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to
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 safe human
life
.
From the
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The
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information
 that they consumed, it can bring
the
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new opportunity
with
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in
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 their lives.
First
,
Society
 can be improved with small little things which means is
share
 as
information
 about scientific
research
to
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with
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 everyone. So everyone can
had
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have
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 their own thought
for
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on
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 the development of the
research
, or maybe everyone can
critics
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critique
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 the
research
.
In
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At
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 the end of the day, because
human
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a human
the human
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being
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beings
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 can access all the
information
 of scientific
research
human
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humans
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 can develop some critical thinking. Critical thinking is a basic to improving
society
.
On the other hand
,
share
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sharing
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 as
information
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much information
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 as
a
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possible is a basic human
rights
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right
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. Human
being
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beings
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 need to consume more knowledge from scientific
research
 so because of that
human
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humans
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 can
survived
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survive
be survived
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 in the modern world.
Last
,
Share
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Sharing
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 as
information
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much information
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 as
a
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apply
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possible was the key
of
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to
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 having a safe
life
.
Human
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Humans
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 need more scientific
research
 to
improved
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improve
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 their
life
. From
paper
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papers
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that
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published
human
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humans
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 can read
it
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about the new trend
of
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in
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 the world. It can bring
the
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new opportunity and
education
 for
the
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human being. The conclusion of
this
 essay is we need to
getting
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get
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 more open
information
 about scientific
research
, so we can
improved
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improve
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the
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humanity after all and
became
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become
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 the best species in the world.
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