There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making temperature higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising?

Nowadays there are some reasons to enhance the temperature of our planet including cars or
companies
.
This
essay will describe some of the most important causes and will expand on them.
To begin
, the activities of humankind developed very soon and nowadays most
companies
try to produce their products a lot and do not pay attention the environmental questions.In ,addition the most important
fuel
is fossil
fuel
yet and is not switched to another
fuel
via humans. If the governments had prepared a special
fuel
which did not have
pollution
, all people would have utilised it forever.
Furthermore
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It is proper to say that there are some machines which work with fossil fuels to generate some special energy and after
this
, they will have removed via natural resources.
Also
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some
companies
prefer to build their
companies
near the seas or oceans because
This
kind of way to reduce the prices of products for generations and after
this
,by the special natural circulations, all the
pollution
which in their wastewater will come into the air and atmosphere.
Moreover
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some people in developing countries do not know special ways how to use some machines and some vehicles are utilised in a bad way and are made a lot of corruption. To conclude
this
essay I should say that all the reasons mentioned above cause a wide range of
pollution
like air
pollution
, water
pollution
and some like them and to continue, the temperature of the earth planet is increasing via them.
Hence
, governments and organizations should try to share some knowledge with people to improve their data for decreasing the temperature of the earth.
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