Being a celebrity such as famous film star or sports personality bring problem as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems.

Nowadays being a superstar, whether a movie star or
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identity, has its own benefits, as well as issues it can cause. While being a celebrity can ensure financial sustainability in your life, I believe that it brings more problems
such
as a lack of privacy in your life. The advantage
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being famous is financial stability. Money matters a lot these days. With
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money
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you can solve most of your problems as well as raise your standards of living. It is
also
much easier to earn money for celebrities rather than ordinary people. They give a little effort and get a lot of payment for that.
For example
, supermodels
such
as Kendall Jenner and her sisters have millions of followers on Instagram. They can get paid for advertising brands, cosmetics and so on. Despite
this
, I believe that
this
advantage can not outweigh the fact that you get a lot of haters and be stalked. The main disadvantage of being a popular personality is the lack of personal space. They should be deeply careful of what they wear, and how they talk and behave. Stalkers are very picky and can notice every little detail.
For example
, they can not have a simple dinner in a restaurant as paparazzi are following every step. The photos taken of them eating and walking will be posted on social media.
This
can lead to judgement from different groups of people. In conclusion,
although
being a famous star brings you a financially stable life, it
also
takes away your privacy.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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