Due to so many young people dropping out from schools the rate of unemployment is increasing and it affects our society in different ways. In your opinion, how can this situation be improved?

Nowadays, the percentage of people who do not have jobs has immensely escalated and the reason behind
this
is the lagging of
children
from schools and their
education
centres.
This
essay will argue the reasons for leaving schools, its effects on society and the solution to handle
this
problem. There are myriad reasons why students drop out of school.
To begin
with, in the majority of cases people cannot afford the expenses of institutes. Parents of these
children
struggle a lot,
however
, they cannot bear the financial load of their offspring's
education
. For
this
reason, they stop sending their
children
to study.
In other words
, many secondary grades have few students which is a clear indication of quitting classes.
Secondly
, the way of teaching
children
ought to be very interesting and full of fun,
however
, unfortunately,
this
is not the case and the teaching staff do not deliver lectures in the required way.
As a result
, pupils get bored and they prefer odd jobs
instead
of continuing studies. All these above reasons, for leaving school have many negative aspects which influence our society badly.
Firstly
, the percentage of unemployment goes up which, results in different types of crimes
such
as thefts, murders and rapes.
Secondly
, the physical and mental health of our population will be affected badly due to unawareness of health because of lack of
education
. There are solutions to these issues and can be solved with the assistance of all members of society including the government, teachers and parents. Higher authorities of the country should pay heed to the families ,especially poor ones and must help them financially.
Furthermore
, teachers should introduce new ways of teaching for more easy understanding and learning for pupils. To sum up, the rate of unemployment is increasing due to students leaving
education
institutes which
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a lot of drawbacks to our environment. In my opinion, if government, parents and teachers will work hard for their new generation it would ultimately lead to overall success and development of the world.
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