in spite of the advanced made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Science and technologies paved a way for many achievements in
such
archaic industries as crop production and livestock breeding, which at the same time has not eradicated the problem of
food
dearth in various regions. In
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I will try to elucidate the issues that may cause
this
disparity in
food
supply and find some ways to tackle the problem.
Firstly
, there is a yawning gap in capitalization and economical development of different countries around the world which leads to an increasing concentration of finances and resources within a small scope of world industrial leaders. Impoverished countries are unable to modernize their agricultural sector and
thus
get stuck with outdated methods and technologies.
On the other hand
, the low efficiency of the agricultural sector, if compared to the mass production and service sector, impedes its development. The reasons for
this
are low technological
level
, traditions-based approaches and heavy climate dependence, but simultaneously the prices for
food
are often supposed to be restricted to a plausible
level
. Being a low-profit industry, agriculture needs to be supported on the governmental
level
.
This
can be done through the recombination of financial flows, appropriate tax
level
and wise price policy. At the same time subsidizing technological advances is crucial, as it increases the efficiency and profitability of the industry overall. Summing up, inequality at the financial and economical
level
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of different regions causes a lot of problems concerning
food
consumption. Thoughtful governmental policy and international cooperation might eliminate these issues or at least diminish them to a reasonable
level
.
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