Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products any ware in the world. Is it a positive or negative development?

Undoubtedly,
world
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has been changing and
the
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globalism became people able to buy
products
from everywhere.
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certain people
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defend
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it, in my
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it could affect national
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identity
indentity
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identity
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, identity is a mix of culture and beliefs, and after we
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living in
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interconnected world some of these particular styles
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gone.
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, since
Brazil
became an open business many
products
from
others
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countries
such
as China, India and the USA are imported by
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international
internatiinal
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international
websites like Ali Express, so several individuals have
gave
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up
to buy
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goods from their own country, in
this
case
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Brazil
. In
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addition
aditional
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addition
,
Brazil
export millions of material to produce
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diverse
diverses
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diverse
products
such
as car, clothes,
technological
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devices and so,
however
, it has impacted for
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developing
develping
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developing
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hameland
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companies. Clearly our folk become a slave
of
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international companies and it helps for losing our identity.
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although
living in
Brazil
is possible to eat foods from
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nationalities
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an
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example of
chinese
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,
mexican
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,
american
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food, and so. According to homeland micro
entrepenours
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entrepreneurs
, after the facilities to access
impoterd
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imported
products
many people stop buying national
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. Indeed, the population change
they
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behavior
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together de
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