A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to company in your letter -describe the benefit of sponsoring the sport team -summarise the benefits of paying the concepts -say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. I have heard from our community that your company will invest in our living area, either by sponsoring the

sports

team or the music concerts . I will give you my opinion on both of them.

To begin

with, I would suggest that there are many benefits to sponsoring the

sports

team. The children can be healthier in both mental and physical health by playing

sports

, and it will be a big help to move them away from any bad activities.

On the other hand

, music is the best way to reduce stress and can bring people from different regions and backgrounds close together. it can make people happier and more motivated.

However

, I think we should spend the money on the children's

sports

team because the younger generation plays an important role in society, so we need to ensure that they will have the best opportunity to develop both mental and physical health. I hope you consider my perspective Should you have any concerns regarding my letter, please let me know. Yours faithfully, Joy Kim

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