In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What do you think are the causes of this development and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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this

essay, I will be considering how some

teachers

reward

students

who achieve outstanding academic

results

in comparison to

teachers

that reward those that display the most improvement. While I will consider both views, it is my opinion that most

teachers

focus on academic

results

rather than personal improvement within subject areas.

To begin

, I would like to draw attention to the importance of academic

results

students

attend schools and universities in order to achieve outstanding

results

and qualifications. Since

this

is of primary

import

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importance

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, many educational establishments are pressured to ensure their

students

receive the best grades possible.

This

pressure often leads to a narrow vision in which educators are so engrossed with academic

results

that they sometimes lose sight of those that are demonstrating progress against those that are consistently receiving excellent

results

In contrast

, there are educators that prioritise development.

For example

, many

teachers

provide feedback - whether oral or written - in order to help

students

tackle their areas of growth. In doing so, they are aware of

students

' strengths and weaknesses. When

students

make necessary adjustments and illustrate progress via their work, some

teachers

celebrate

this

through education-specific reward schemes and verbal praise. Despite

this

, I would argue that the majority of educators are overwhelmed by demands (often by their line managers) to achieve the best

results

; in a handful of schools,

for example

teachers

' salaries are performance-based and they only progress upon receiving outstanding

results

Therefore

, it is difficult to draw binaries and argue that it is either one or the other;

nevertheless

, I would argue that, while some

teachers

are concerned with gradual improvements over time, as a matter of urgency and priority, most are primarily focused on

students

achieving academic success via

results

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In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What do you think are the causes of this development and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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