In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Agriculture
is the main source of
food
supply to people throughout the world and it is now equipped with advanced
technology
applied to all aspects of farming. Despite the improvements, a significant amount of people
is
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staying hungry which is a global health problem. In my following ,essay
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will illustrate underlying reasons and possible solutions for
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.
To begin
with,
food
insufficiency is mainly observed in underdeveloped
countries
due to
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of reasons.They mainly use manpower for their
agriculture
while developed
nations
apply the latest
technology
.On the other ,hand new
technology
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resulted
inresulted
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resulted
improved
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quality of seeds to give rise to more crops than regular seeds, resisting climate change and shorter duration for crops, all these are applied in developed
nations
rather than others. Poor
countries
don't have enough budget to get that
technologytechnology
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technology technology
to their
countries
and follow the regular farming methods. Coming to the possible solution, is mainly by aiding the poor
countries
by supplying necessary
technology
and equipment freely.WHO and other world organizations have to play a vital role to help poor
nations
by funding money to invest
on
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new aspects of
agriculture
to improve crops with the ultimate aim of increasing
food
availability. Developed
country's
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economies mainly depend on industries and more job opportunities should make available for poor
nations
in their counties. In conclusion, new agricultural advancements should be made available to poor
nations
that depend on regular
agriculture
to improve
food
availability and
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b to minimize the population starving in the world.
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