The modern mega-city has many problems. What are the main problems facing large cities today? What should be done to alleviate these problems?

In the fast-growing ,world
the
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big cities are facing numerous problems while developing.
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the different kinds of problems that megacities are encountering and solutions to eliminate them. The difficulties of modern
mega cities
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are during the development
,
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while constructing huge projects like flyovers,metro bridges and double lane roads
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with in
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the
city
there will be huge traffic
jam
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where even an ambulance might not advance into the streets in time, vehicles
immovement
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movement
improvement
can occur at any busy location
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might
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some
people
economically . Street vendors and small-wage workers who
lives
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in the
city
gets
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effected
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, as there will be a chance that
people
might prefer mega-malls even for their basic needs.
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Noise and air pollution will increase and that culminates
people
's health directly. A survey is conducted
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Delhi AIIMS University students about the air quality index which showed some shocking results that
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by 2070 humans might take artificial oxygen intake.
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the most common problem that many
cosmopolis
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faces is unemployment for the local
people
and
also
the increase
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population
it
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disturbs the whole harmony of
city
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. In my view there are a few solutions that might eradicate some of these problems partially by involving local
people
in major occupancies in the companies,
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the mega projects should be given multiple contractors by splitting the work which might speed up the process. For reducing pollution the Government should take
active
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part in planting trees, constructing
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parks and creating noise-free zones within the streets of the
city
which improves public health and prosperity.
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