Some people prefer to use energy-saving modes of transportation like hybrid cars and bicycles. Others prefer the usual mode of transportation like buses and trains because it is fast and efficient. Which mode of transportation do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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People
use
transportation
means to travel from one place to another. Some are keen on using traditional methods of
transportation
such
as buses and trains while others prefer to
use
modern means of
transportation
which are innovative. I strongly support the latter approach which
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energy
efficient. Buses and trains are the most reachable means
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transportation
available for man in cities.
However
, due to
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number of these vehicles, pollution across the city is leading to its maximum limit.
Further
, these modes of commute have
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drawback of not dropping the passenger
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their exact location.
Hence
, choosing these kinds of
transportation
means is reducing day by day.
To begin
with, it is well known that technology has revolutionized the world. The world has seen tremendous achievements in all sectors. Out of all the sectors, there has been a drastic enhancement in the
transportation
sector.
For example
, the invention of hybrid and electric cars which was once thought of as impossible
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has now been made pragmatic. These cars
use
electricity to recharge themselves rather than fuels used by orthodox vehicles.
As a result
, it helps in saving
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sources of
energy
. The usage of modern technology to deal with day-to-day hindrances has become a norm now.
For instance
, by using
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hybrid cars or even bicycles the usage of fuels is drastically reduced, thereby, air pollution is reduced.
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sum up, the
use
of
energy saving
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modes of
transportation
should be encouraged
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which
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which
have proven to advantageous than the means which are already
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. These modern and
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aid us by reducing pollution, saving expenses and
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sources of
energy
and
thus
saving the environment.
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