Some people think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Other think adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

Living for the enjoyment of your soul can happen to all ages. The
gladness
of your soul can happen both young
age
and mature
age
.
Therefore
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on how you design your
life
.
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personally think that living happily is driven by multiple factors.
Firstly
, younger
people
are extremely elated during
this
age
because they are not expected to earn money, take care of their family and suffered from any disease, as their parents are already taking care of them.
In addition
, young
people
contain with many power, freedom and
life
pathway.
On the other hand
, they may seek some task or information that they didn't think before doing it. There might be
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and
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in the whole
life
in the future.
As a result
,  most
people
still think of being young
age
as the best time of their lives.
Secondly
, the views of being mature
age
are like
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which is so much different from an adolescent. Being mature will come up with apply plenty of responsibilities due to a real chapter of your
life
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starting. Some
people
need to take care of their
family
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, work hard to get money or suffer from
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.
Moreover
, most
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mature
people
evaluate their
gladness
by fame, wealth and prestige. These are suffered things compare to adolescent
life
.
However
, the
people
who can achieve these things might refer to the
gladness
in their
life
. In conclusion, young
age
and mature
age
have their own personal way to determine the
gladness
of their
life
. In my opinion, I believe that being young is the best part of
life
that brings tremendous moments that you will never forget it.
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