In many countries the age of criminals is getting lower. Give reasons and solutions to the problem

Most countries are facing an increase in crime rates and most alarmingly by young offenders. Many recent changes in family, educational and social structures are indirectly contributing to the surge of
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criminal
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offences
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offence
. Addressing the root causes would help in tackling
this
serious
issue
before it
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to go beyond control.
To begin
with, younger generations are inclined to engage in unlawful activities because they
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lack
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guidance. In older days,
children
were brought up in a
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environment, where the parents closely observed and protected them from danger.
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drug
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school
children
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kept quite low because of vigilant parents and teachers. Unfortunately, the
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raising kids has allowed them to fall prey to certain activities
such
as
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of drugs and robberies
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, lack of guidance in
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of
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children
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children
had created young criminals.
Furthermore
, rising poverty levels had contributed to
this
problem. Because of recent
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many families faces debts and fail to provide for their
children
. Schooling of
children
is disturbed, and they fall
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the hands of criminal masterminds and become exploited.
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clear evidence
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poverty
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increased
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increased
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criminal activities among younger people. In order to solve
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law enforcement should have
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approach
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tackling
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tackling
the
drug
issue
. Education
istitutes
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institutes
should be protected from drugs. The offenders of
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drug related
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activity should be rehabilitated and closely monitored.
Secondly
, families struggling with caring for
children
should be supported
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financially
by the
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government
governement
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government
.
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, providing meals in the school would promote more school
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attendees
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attendees
. Needless to explain how
such
simple interventions would invariably save the
children
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conclusion
, stealing and other unlawful
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activities
acitivities
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activities
are on the rise, predominately among
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because of
the
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poor
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guidance
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guidance
and increase poverty. Tackling
the
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drug
usage using law enforcement and supporting families to raise responsible
children
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feasible
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for
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issue
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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