Prevention is better than cure. Do you agree or disagree that out of the country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health and education and preventive measures?

The allocation of the nation’s
health
budget plays an integral part in the well-being of its
people
. I agree that
prevention
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the prevention
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of
diseases
through
health
teachings and various modalities to avoid certain illnesses should have a greater percentage
from
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of
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the total
health
share.
Health
education provides
people
with information that they need to maintain a healthy body, avoid injuries, and prevent
diseases
.
Health
teaching and information dissemination
increases
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the awareness of the
people
on different programs provided by the
government
that they can take advantage of to promote their
health
and wellness. It
also
provides a venue for
health
care providers and
people
in authority to conduct seminars and conferences on how to avoid injuries and accidents at home and at work.
Furthermore
, knowledge
on
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of
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different
diseases
, primarily
its
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their
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prevention and early detection will prevent individuals from getting the disease, thereby, averting them to go through extensive and expensive treatments later on. With
this
approach, the
government
can save money and at the same time boost a healthier community.
In addition
, preventive measures and protocols when strictly observed and followed will have a great impact
in
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on
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minimizing, containing, and eventually stopping the spread of
diseases
and
decrease
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decreasing
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incidence
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the incidence
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of accidents and injuries. Examples of
which
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these
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are hand washing, immunization and vaccinations, wide distribution of barriers for sexually transmitted infections,
appropriate
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and appropriate
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and safe equipment and
gears
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gear
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for employees at work and for
people
at home
especially
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,especially
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the kids. When these measures and protocols are observed,
spread
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the spread
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of infection decreases and preventable
diseases
and accidents can be eliminated,
hence
, the
government
will not have to spend more on the treatment and rehabilitation of its
people
. In conclusion, spending more on prevention rather than cure can significantly help the
government
achieve a healthy and safe community. By directing its resources on more essential aspects of
health
, it is proactively promoting the
people
’s optimum level of wellness
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while at
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the same time preventing any future illnesses and treatment.
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