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People believe that arts like painting and music does not directly improve the quality of life, and therefore they think government’s money should be spent on other things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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is consider
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by some
people
 that
arts
 like painting and music
does
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 not directly improve the quality of
life
, and
therefore
 they think
government’s
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the government’s
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 money should be spent on other things. I completely disagree with the opinion
,
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and think
arts
 affect societies in a nice way in the world .
Arts
 can touch
to
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many
children
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children's
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life
 or they can finish wars and
poorness
 .
Firstly
 , there are many troubles
such
 as
war
 ,
poorness
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and poorness
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 in our lives . Unfortunately , many
country
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countries
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 struggle with
war
 and
poorness
 , and
therefore
 many societies
exposure
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bad days due to these problems .
On the other hand
 ,
arts
 directly affect their
life
 in a nice way if governments still continue to reach
arts
 for these societies .
For instance
 ,
Leanordo
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Leonardo
 da
vinci
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Vinci
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who
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whom
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the
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is the
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most
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apply
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painter finished the
african
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African
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war
 a hundred years ago thanks to his art , and afterwards countries rescued wars and
poorness
.
Secondly
 , many
children
 can't discover their talents , and
thus
 they live an ordinary
life
 like many
people
. These
children
 can finish a
war
 or they can teach many
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different
diffent
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different
 things to other
people
 if governments still display care
with
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 needs .
For instance
 ,
Bethoween
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Between
 couldn't give many important
song
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songs
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 if the government didn't display
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the
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art
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arts
 care that needs , and
therefore
 many
people
 who
interested
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are interested
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with
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in
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arts
 could
has
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have
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other jobs
such
 as
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a doctor
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doctor
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doctors
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,
teacher
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teachers
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,
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and lawyer
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lawyer
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lawyers
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. İn conclusion ,
arts
 can do many things
such
 as finish
war
 , touch
children
 in our lives , and
thus
 governments should continue
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to spend
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spend
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spending
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 their money
to
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on
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 art . Many
children
 can be like
Leanordo
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Leonardo
 da
vinci
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Vinci
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 or many
people
 will protect from wars thanks to
arts
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the arts
show examples
 .
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