Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution prob- lems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Above all, pollution and,
consequently
, growing
traffic
are the most important problems happening nowadays in any city. We all have lived the
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consequences
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consequences
of those problems
through
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one way or another.
For instance
, we are
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seriously
seriusly
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seriously
facing climate change, which is made
by
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mainly
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petrol. Another example is the
traffic
that we go through every day wasting a lot of time. There are many solutions to resolve
this
situation
such
as
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increase
increasing
increas
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increasing
the
price
of
pretrol
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petrol
,
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the
use
of public
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transport
trasport
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transport
,
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the
use
of certain
vehicles
which have already been used enough, etc. In the
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we are going to assess whether increasing the
price
of petrol is a good idea to stop the
growing
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of
traffic
and pollution or it is not the best.
First
, we must agree
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fact that if the
price
of
gas
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increase,
less
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people
is
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going to
use
private
vehicles
;
therefore
, if it
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happens
, the demand
of
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public
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transport
trasport
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transport
would increase. So, we can be sure
about
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that
this
would work.
However
, it would
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not
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no
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be the best solution as the public
vehicles
are not
apropiate
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appropriate
because Peru does not have a competent
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infrastructure
infraestructure
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infrastructure
. The other solution which I consider more
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appropriate
apropiate
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appropriate
is not increasing the prices
,
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but promoting and upgrading the public service.
Thus
, the
use
of it would be based on the own people's
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initiative
iniciative
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initiative
and, in the same way, not
a
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increase
of
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price
. Concluding, Reducing
the
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people's petrol
consume
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by increasing
the
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prices is not the best solution
for
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pollution and
traffic
growing
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.
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Consequently
, it is better to upgrade the public
vehicles
and
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because that would promote the demand
of
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it
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, and, above all,
this
investment would try to reach a world without global warming and horrible
traffic
.
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