Nowadays many people want to buy famous brands of clothes, car and other items. what are the reasons for this ? do you think it is positive or negative development ?

It is undeniable fact that
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people
are spending much on goods
such
as clothes,
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and other items. The main reason is that
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the quality of
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and to
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to
people
purchase
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these kinds of items.
However
, I personally believe that it is negative development as it directly
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the
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society
. The
first
and foremost reason is that, owing to
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of
products
maily
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mainly
these
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have goodwill in
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and they guarantee the
products
so
people
are more inclined to buy these types of
products
. To quote
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and
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example,
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spark shoes are more durable and comfortable
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to
other brand
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, as well as
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give good services
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their customers . Another reason to support my ideology is that
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the branded
products
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person
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wealth and status in
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society
such
as those who drive
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shows
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wealthy
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in
society
. On the other side, when
people
buy costly
products
it
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to
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financial burden .
Moreover
, when it comes to shopping , one should search the
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products
produts
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products
on
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other outlets .
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example,
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Nowadays
Noadays
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nowadays
many companies sell better
products
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less price
such
as Nike , Reebok and Puma .
In addition
to that, they use recycle
products
and it
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to
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environment
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benefits . So
people
should think twice before purchasing any
products
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close scrutiny,
people
are more
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to buy costly
products
to show off to
society
, and I believe that
people
spending
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more on these
products
which
have
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detrimental effects on
people
and
society
.
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