In recent times many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negative effects on society?

Nowadays, almost everyone thinks that
money
is the most important factor in their
lives
.
Money
lets
people
live happily and enjoy their
lives
. We often spend 8 hours a day or more working and earn a salary. In order to pay daily bills,
essentials
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, or cheer up our ordinary/ mediocre
lives
with a ticket to the movie theatre, shopping, and
traveling
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. But is
money
the only reason
people
pursue happiness? In my point of view,
this
depends on each person’s opinion. It is true that
money
plays an important role in today’s life as it helps us to improve our
lives
and make our society become more enjoyable and pleasurable. In my country, there are a lot of rich
people
.
For instance
: actors, athletes, and singers. They get
money
by having a lot of fans or admires following them.
However
, not all of them are content with/ interested in their wealthy
lives
. In fact, many newspapers write about celebrities. They admitted that they sometimes felt stress which made them rude and out of control/depressed toward other
people
.
Therefore
,
money
doesn’t actually make humans happy. So if
money
doesn’t bring happiness to
people
then
what are the other factors? Some
people
are enjoying their
lives
when they have good partners around them. Or doing interesting activities to blow out the stress or have quality time with their family. Meanwhile, other
people
are satisfied with their daily
lives
when they help disadvantaged
people
, more unfortunate ones. I prefer to spend my time eating out in a restaurant or playing with my buddies. But having more
money
would make everyone’s
lives
become more enjoyable, better and better. Overall, without
money
, we can’t enjoy ourselves to the fulness.
However
, remember that we don’t have an endless life to chase
money
as there are a lot of simple ways to find happiness, and live healthily.
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