modetn forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people seeing their friends. this has had a negative effect on theire social hives. to what etent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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use modern forms of communication
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we are going to investigate whether the amount of
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people spend with their friends has been decreased by modern communication or if it has had
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impact on their social
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.
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decreased the
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get together.
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each other by sending email and
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types of developed communications.
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. it helps them to save
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time
.
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of email and
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instead
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make them more confident. what is more, it provides individuals with quick ways to have
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with their beloveds whenever and wherever they want.
For instance
, when you are busy are not able to see them in person.
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life and helps a variety of
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to keep in touch and transfer important information as quickly as possible. The
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if people have
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time
they are more likely to ignore technology and are willing to
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believe technology especially modern communication provides more convenience for individuals and has increased the quality and quantity of communications.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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