Some peopl believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matter that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In today’s societies,
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children
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tend to work on themselves without interfering
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others, including the basic things.
However
, the
parents
, especially the controversial ones, are more accustomed to doing everything for their
children
, without letting their kids decide what they want.
However
, there are some circumstances that the
children
need to be cultivated to grow up with the habits of making decisions themselves.
First
of all,
children
at a young age want to do
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things as they wish, but end up mostly in trouble or crying. At that time, the
parents
cannot let the
children
do what they want so they always insist on being involved in every
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, not only basic things
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but
also
in some personal choices. According to the researchers and latest research papers, those kinds of
children
are more likely to depend on others when being grown up as it becomes their habit.
Therefore
, it is the right practice for
parents
to allow
children
to make their own choices on everyday matters unless those choices are not seriously affecting their kids.
Although
it sounds like the
children
may become individualists, the schools,
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practices, which should adapt to the community spirit and enhance group work, and the country’s programs for the
children
will enhance them to be more socialist.
On the other hand
, since the
parents
want their
children
to decide on their own for only some matters that affect them, it can be said that it is a right practice for the
parents
to not only let them decide but
also
take responsibility for that.
For example
, when I worked as a volunteer in a local community centre, a child went up to quite a high place and requested me to help him down. No sooner was I about to help him,
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volunteer told the kid that if he got in trouble, he would
also
know the way of getting out of trouble. I believe
this
is
also
a good practice for the
parents
that the
children
must take responsibility for themselves. Henceforth, it is my opinion that the
children
should be let to decide what they want and take responsibility for the decisions they make.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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