Some peopl believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matter that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In today’s societies,

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children

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tend to work on themselves without interfering

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others, including the basic things.

However

, the

parents

, especially the controversial ones, are more accustomed to doing everything for their

children

, without letting their kids decide what they want.

However

, there are some circumstances that the

children

need to be cultivated to grow up with the habits of making decisions themselves.

First

of all,

children

at a young age want to do

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things as they wish, but end up mostly in trouble or crying. At that time, the

parents

cannot let the

children

do what they want so they always insist on being involved in every

matters

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, not only basic things

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but

also

in some personal choices. According to the researchers and latest research papers, those kinds of

children

are more likely to depend on others when being grown up as it becomes their habit.

Therefore

, it is the right practice for

parents

to allow

children

to make their own choices on everyday matters unless those choices are not seriously affecting their kids.

Although

it sounds like the

children

may become individualists, the schools,

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practices, which should adapt to the community spirit and enhance group work, and the country’s programs for the

children

will enhance them to be more socialist.

On the other hand

, since the

parents

want their

children

to decide on their own for only some matters that affect them, it can be said that it is a right practice for the

parents

to not only let them decide but

also

take responsibility for that.

For example

, when I worked as a volunteer in a local community centre, a child went up to quite a high place and requested me to help him down. No sooner was I about to help him,

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volunteer told the kid that if he got in trouble, he would

also

know the way of getting out of trouble. I believe

this

also

a good practice for the

parents

that the

children

must take responsibility for themselves. Henceforth, it is my opinion that the

children

should be let to decide what they want and take responsibility for the decisions they make.

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