A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend some mone

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am excited to know about your's sponsoring of our community. As you mentioned, I would like to inform you that our kids are very poor at

sports

despite the biggest ground in the town.

Hence

, If you can sponsor the team in the

two years and they may perform in a phenomenal way all the way.

In addition

, everyone will get motivated toward

sports

eventually, and their physical fitness will be increased which is a good sign for our society.

On the other hand

, concerts will bring everyone together regardless of status and region.

However

, I strongly believe that

this

would be a fun event for all of us.

Furthermore

, these events will encourage new talent and create a well-established platform to showcase their mind-blowing skills along with mesmerizing dances too. As you know,

Sports

will be provided incalculable strength to our

generations which is much needed by all of us.

Hence

, Undoubtedly, we need to think of

sports

and basic facilities which bring swift growth in their career.

On the other hand

, these things may play a big role throughout their life. I would really appreciate it if you could consider sponsoring the

sports

event. I look forward to hearing a response with good news soon. Hope it will come soon. Best Regards, Lakshmi.

Submitted by lakshma999 on Tue Aug 16 2022

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