You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

letter to point out some incorrect data you have published in the latest article in your magazine about

Isfahan

Firstly

it is crucially important to let you know that

Isfahan

is not the capital of Iran

also

it is not the most crowded and polluted

city

in Iran

on the contrary

Isfahan

is an ancient

city

with so many places to visit and it is peaceful and calm and the weather is not polluted at all. The reason I am writing to you about our town is that

Isfahan

is a tourist place and there are so many tourist traps and there are so many tourists visiting our

city

every year. The wrong info provided in your article will negatively affect our tourism rate

in addition

to its income for the

city

accordingly

. I highly suggest you please publish the correct information about our

city

month and mention previously provided information was incorrect indeed. Yours faithfully, Fateme Banihashem

Submitted by fa.banihashem on Wed Aug 10 2022

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