Some people think that arts (such as painting and music) does not directly improve the quality of people's life, so governments should spend money on other areas. Do you agree or disagree?
In our modern society, the development of the economy and
culture
cannot lack contribution to the arts
because it brings a multitude of advantages to serve everyone. Some people
believe that the government should earn money in other zones but from my point of view, arts
which
completely help develop the economy and Correct pronoun usage
apply
culture
.
First
and foremost, in the world, improving international relationships is important for the growth of a nation. The countries can transfer and share culture
from arts
such
as paint or music which help connect people
with people
and special these things influence
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influenced
from
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by
are
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is
a group music
famous in the global. They broadcast Korean Remove the article
group music
a piece of group music
culture
from Korea to America, China, Thailand, Vietnam, etc. Furthermore
, the relationships will become friendly and close because of the impact of the picture, music, actors
to reappear history or propagandize images and language Correct word choice
and actors
culture
, moreover
it Add a comma
,moreover
also
makes the add beautiful of a nation.
On the other hand
, the
art not only brings quality entertainment but it Correct article usage
apply
also
a large contribuild
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contributed
taxes
to increase the government budget which can be used for a wide range of purposes. Change preposition
to taxes
Additionally
, entertainment increases a huge source of income for nations. For example
: total sales of screen film in Vietnam in 2019 was up 4100 billion ( up 26% compared with 2018), the movie in Vietnam accounted for 29% sales
with over 1150 billion and dramatic growth Change preposition
of sales
with
40% compared with 2018. Obviously, these things improved Change preposition
of
quality
of life significantly. It helps Correct article usage
the quality
people
decline stress after hours of work and creates emotion to
everyone. In fact, it can decrease the negative which makes them Change preposition
for
more happy
, Replace the words
happier
confident
anywhere.
In conclusion, Correct word choice
and confident
arts
are affected by relationships and economics. Moreover
, they bring entertainment high with people
’s life.Submitted by phuongthao.3822 on
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