Despite improvements in vehicle technology, there are still large numbers of road accidents. Explain some of the causes of these accidents and suggest some measures that could be taken to address the problem.

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in spite of developments in vehicle technology. The following essay takes a look at the main reasons

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driveway crashes and

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some possible solutions to avoid them.

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alarming incident vary. In some cases, it happens due to drunk driving, which means that people lose control while driving a car because of alcohol, drugs or other factors

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can detrimentally affect

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3 people were dyed in a car collision,

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one of the drivers was madly tipsy. On the national level, the obvious solution is to warn

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regularly about the significance of sober-minded driving

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social media and banners.

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, terrible external conditions may cause

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accidents.

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, if you can not see anything around through the rainstorm, it would be arduous to drive properly. As an example, according to the statistics, more frightening incidents occur during bad weather. Responsible faces need to inform locals on time in relation to annual conditions and potential consequences of

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negative driveway events is ignorance of traffic laws. Precisely, humans can get

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without total knowledge of rules, and

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half of

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. The way forward should be the regulation

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work of specific places and let people pass the exams by themselves, without any unbelievable circumstances. In conclusion,

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car accident is a serious issue throughout both

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and developed worlds, if the above steps

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as common warning are taken, the situation will surely improve in the coming future.

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Despite improvements in vehicle technology, there are still large numbers of road accidents. Explain some of the causes of these accidents and suggest some measures that could be taken to address the problem.

Fully explain your ideas

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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, however, think that change is always a good things. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Children engaged in sport are often overloaded with physical activity or get serious traumas. What are the main reasons of this? What solutions can you suggest?