These days, many people are moving from rural areas to city centers. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

These days, most citizens chose to move from
village
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to
city
centers
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. Some
people
think
this
lead to separate families because men are the ones who start
this
process, while others say
this
is a positive step to take because
people
have better job opportunities. I believe moving to a
city
is preferable than stay in rural areas to get a better education and employment. On one hand, believing that family is
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going
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going
to
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by moving abroad is not a
sustantable
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sustainable
reason. Many
people
who stay
at
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their village still have the same
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possibility
posibility
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possibility
to get
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. It
is argue
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that
family
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should
be keep
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together if they want to succeed.
However
,
this
sometimes does not
work
only by staying close to each other.
For instance
, in Mexico
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, during the day many women do not stay at home with their
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children
chikdren
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children
because they need to go to
work
to
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sustain
their
family
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.
As a result
,
this
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absence
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a big gap
among
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the couple.
However
, I believe if there is true love, it does not
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matter
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matter
the
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circumstance
circumstances
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circumstances
to fight for the family.
On the other hand
, many
people
who live in rural areas dream to move to a
city
because most of them have better jobs and life. It
is well know
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that living in a
city
demands more
work
and education, so
people
can find a decent salary. On top of
this
, society become
accostum
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accustom
to
work
and studied at the same time to
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increase
increases
their chances to reach their goals. To explain my point, in the United States
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immigrant
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immigrants
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need to
work
and attend school to get a degree, and they can demand
higher
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a higher
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salary
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. With
this
, citizens are able to send money to their village and support their
family
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families
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. I believe
this
is a positive decision to obtain a
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better
bette
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better
life and education. To conclude,
although
leaving the rural area is a hard process, it is preferable to take the risk and evolve because there are more changes in a
city
to get a decent salary than in a rural area. I have no doubt that
this
is preferable than stay and
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some miracles are going to occur and resolve the situation.
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