Some people think that it is best to save money, for example in a bank or savings scheme. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available. Discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate. Give reasons for your answer, and support your essay with ideas and examples from your own experience.

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Spending and saving

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part of live thou financial stability and good life is paramount. While some population is of the view that saving fund in

bank

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the bank

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is better others individuals

prefers

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to spend theirs. In

this

, daddy both views will be discussed and my opinion will be stated.

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people

spend their funds in other to have a better life

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feeding, clothing,

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shopping

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mall with friends and family to enjoy their lives. Spending creates revenue for the government in handling

communities

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structures.

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, the spirit of spending encourages one to establish an investment

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and other projects which can be beneficial in future. Spending

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funds is literally part of fun and enjoyment.

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, the volume of availability of money makes

people

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spend s lot just to live up to their expectations.

On the other hand

, saving

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funds

prevent

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unnecessary

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expenses

expensive

expensives

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expenses

. It

also

help

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to fight against

unforseen

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circumstances that had to do with health.

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, during the previous pandemic that had

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affected

people

's source of livelihood thereby limiting income , so many

people

had to make use of the reserve which

the

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saved up from their salaries and

other resource

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another resource

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. Saving limits unnecessary embarrassment which can arise at the

peck

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of difficulties.

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, it helps to acquire better life for

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the generation

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generation

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to come as part of

inheritance

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the inheritance

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. In summary , every individual

have

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their

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personality

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regarding

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how to handle their

incomes

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income

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. regardless, both views have their benefits but knowing how to economise is vital.

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