Some people think that it is best to save money, for example in a bank or savings scheme. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available. Discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate. Give reasons for your answer, and support your essay with ideas and examples from your own experience.

Spending and saving
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part of live thou financial stability and good life is paramount. While some population is of the view that saving fund in
bank
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is better others individuals
prefers
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to spend theirs. In
this
, daddy both views will be discussed and my opinion will be stated.
Firstly
,
people
spend their funds in other to have a better life
for example
feeding, clothing,
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to
shopping
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the shopping
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mall with friends and family to enjoy their lives. Spending creates revenue for the government in handling
communities
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structures.
Also
, the spirit of spending encourages one to establish an investment
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and other projects which can be beneficial in future. Spending
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funds is literally part of fun and enjoyment.
Furthermore
, the volume of availability of money makes
people
to
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spend s lot just to live up to their expectations.
On the other hand
, saving
of
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funds
prevent
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unnecessary
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expenses
expensive
expensives
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expenses
. It
also
help
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to fight against
unforseen
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unforeseen
circumstances that had to do with health.
for example
, during the previous pandemic that had
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affected
people
's source of livelihood thereby limiting income , so many
people
had to make use of the reserve which
the
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they
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saved up from their salaries and
other resource
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another resource
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. Saving limits unnecessary embarrassment which can arise at the
peck
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of difficulties.
Furthermore
, it helps to acquire better life for
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the generation
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generation
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to come as part of
inheritance
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the inheritance
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. In summary , every individual
have
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their
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personality
on
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how to handle their
incomes
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. regardless, both views have their benefits but knowing how to economise is vital.
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