Some people belive that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such as fast food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think bout their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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, clothes and entertainment is a very common thing these days, especially in the western world. It is

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their own life, the better it is for their personal development.

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some people of the opposite opinion, as they believe, that

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and give a personal conclusion.

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own clothes will become much more familiar with making an appropriate choice. A

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is always dressed by their parents will not learn that

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choose

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either by occasion or by weather. On the other, is it possible that some kids might take

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of their freedom

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Most kids are very naive and very often do not think about

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which might follow

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unhealthy

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matters is a good thing as long these

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