Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

In
this
new era, many working-class people immerse themselves so much into
work
, that they are left with almost no
time
for any recreational or personal activity. In my opinion,
this
lifestyle brings them
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of
problems
like poor mental
health
, relationship issues, inefficient
work
performance, and various
health
problems
. In
this
essay, I will briefly explain all of these disadvantages.
Firstly
, when we devote all of our
time
to
work
, we devoid ourselves
from
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any
time
to rejuvenate our
mind
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.
Furthermore
, if keep on repeating
this
daily pattern, we start to suffer from mental illnesses like anger, stress, and other psychological disorders.
For example
, when I started my career in 2012, I begin to
work
around the clock, giving myself no
time
for recreational activities, and
as a result
, I suffered from Insomnia.
In addition
to
this
, as our minds are not in their optimum
health
because of overworking, it
also
results in poor performance at
work
.
Therefore
, all in all, it results even negatively for the purpose for which we were sacrificing all of our
time
for
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. To explain
this
, many companies are now forcing their employees to finish their
work
and leave their offices on
time
; and they are seeing tremendous advantages of
this
.
Further
to say that
,
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working for extended hours leaves one with no
time
to spend with family;
hence
, creates relationship
problems
.
For example
, these days, divorce rates are skyrocketing, and
this
is observed mainly in those couples, who are giving very little
time
to each other, mainly due to giving their whole
time
to
work
.
Lastly
, as
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modern people are giving very little
time
to any physical activities due to overworking,
health
issues like obesity,
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and cardio-vascular
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diseases are on the rise. Personally, many of my family members, even in their middle age, have suffered heart attacks, as they have no
time
for exercise. In conclusion, the internal drive to career growth is so strong in most of today's working class,
they
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neglect the long-term harmful effects like hampered
work
performance, family issues, poor
health
, and mental
health
problems
. To sum it up, people should devote only the required amount of
time
to
work
, so that they have plenty of
time
to give to their families, recreation, physical exercises, and mental rejuvenation.
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