Sone students tend to travel after finishing school and spend time working somewhere instead of going to the university directly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that a few pupils prefer to travel after completing school and getting employed rather than attending university immediately. There are several merits and demerits of it

To begin

with, when a pupil starts working anywhere,they can apply the knowledge which they gained from school and understand the concept in a better way.

This

will not only help them in gaining experience but can

also

fund their

further

studies

cost.

For instance

, my neighbour's daughter took a year gap to gain work experience and

then

she afterwards paid her tuition fees all by herself.

Secondly

students

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who lack social

skills

and communication, Work after school will gradually improve their social

skills

. It is very important for any individual to have communication

skills

to get

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success

succes

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success

For example

, a friend of mine was extremely shy and had difficulty

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dealing with people, but he managed to get a job and

therefore

after three or so months of dealing in public made his communication

skills

effective

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. There are several demerits of it.

Firstly

, taking a year or two gap may get them difficulty in getting admission for

further

studies

. It has been seen that many pupils who had a gap could not get into their dream college, so it is important for any pupil to be aware of

requirements

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the requirements

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for studying in

specific

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field or college and plan

accordingly

to it.

Secondly

, working can make a student

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lose interest in

studies

, as

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apply

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quite

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quiet

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a lot of people regret

for

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leaving their

studies

completely which

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further

can cause unemployment. To wrap up, it is

although

a good way to make money and gain experience

but

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one should not ignore the

studies

completely.

In other words

, completing and having a degree is way better than working for

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undesirable job

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