Sone students tend to travel after finishing school and spend time working somewhere instead of going to the university directly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no denying the fact that a few pupils prefer to travel after completing school and getting employed rather than attending university immediately. There are several merits and demerits of it
To begin
with, when a pupil starts working anywhere,they can apply the knowledge which they gained from school and understand the concept in a better way.
This
will not only help them in gaining experience but can
also
fund their
further
studies
cost.
For instance
, my neighbour's daughter took a year gap to gain work experience and
then
she afterwards paid her tuition fees all by herself.
Secondly
,
students
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who lack social
skills
and communication, Work after school will gradually improve their social
skills
. It is very important for any individual to have communication
skills
to get
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success
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success
.
For example
, a friend of mine was extremely shy and had difficulty
in
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dealing with people, but he managed to get a job and
therefore
after three or so months of dealing in public made his communication
skills
effective
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. There are several demerits of it.
Firstly
, taking a year or two gap may get them difficulty in getting admission for
further
studies
. It has been seen that many pupils who had a gap could not get into their dream college, so it is important for any pupil to be aware of
requirements
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for studying in
specific
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field or college and plan
accordingly
to it.
Secondly
, working can make a student
to
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lose interest in
studies
, as
a
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quiet
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a lot of people regret
for
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leaving their
studies
completely which
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further
can cause unemployment. To wrap up, it is
although
a good way to make money and gain experience
but
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one should not ignore the
studies
completely.
In other words
, completing and having a degree is way better than working for
a
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undesirable job
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