The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
The pie charts illustrate the three types of
use
of water
in North America
, South America
, Europe, Africa, Central Asia
and Southeast Asia
.
Generally, the majority of water
is useduse
for agricultural purposes, Correct your spelling
used use
used used
whereas
the domestic usage of water
is very less in four different areas and industrial use
in two areas.
In North America
and Europe, the industrial use
of water
is the highest by
48% and 53%, respectively, Change preposition
at
,
Change the punctuation
apply
Correct word choice
and
however
the domestic Add a comma
,however
use
of water
is the lowest in both areas. On the other hand
in South America
, the majority of water
usage is for Agricultural use
and the lesser use
is by Industries.
In Africa, Central Asia
and South East Asia
, the major use
of water
is for agricultural purposes by 84%, 88% and 81%, respectively, whereas
in Africa the industrial use
of water
is Add an article
a decline
the decline
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declined
decline
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declined
The word decline doesn’t seem to fit Correct your spelling
declined
this
context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
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by 7%. Domestic use
of water
in Central Asia
and South East Asia
remain
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remains
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