“Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

Some people opine that the vast numbers of online platforms
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or
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are replaced
instead
of real-connection amongst the society,
however
, they possibly have not considered to
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of the technology advancement ,
for example
,internet networking
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shortened
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the long distances between international students and relatives that they would prefer to talk with their relatives through
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online spaces ,
in addition
,mail-boxes and social
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media
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medias
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have accelerated the
inter personal
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connections with the speed in any place and anytime,so,I completely disagree with
this
statement that it assumed the modern communication have limited the real-relationship and I am going to bring some pieces of the evidence to confirm my opinion. In a beginning , the
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individual's
individusl's
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individual's
spare time will
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organised
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organize
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by their priorities ,alongside
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this
authority,social
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media
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medias
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and electronic devices have helped in the constant touch between friends ,
for example
, when I went to my
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,my emails notifications had
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my meetings and I have not forgotten these ,so ,I visit their on-time,
in addition
, when I want to talk with them ,I used to push the key
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numbers
on my smart-phone and will have contact in
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way,
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,in the earlier time, friends only visit and connect together when they came back from their jobs and It might be needed
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of waiting to meet together. In some little different
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, if a fresh student will travel to studying in abroad ,the online networks will be
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pathway to reach
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their families and they are not going to become
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in a foreign country,while , in the past , many months had spent to
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receive
a letter from their parents .
Finally
, according to
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stories ,it is well-known that
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online networking
such
as
mail-boxes
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and social platforms are useful for keeping attachment of people in these decades.
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