You recently did a short cookery courses. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course. Say how much cooking you've done since the course. Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am one of your students who finished the cookery

course

at your school. I would like to participate in my feedback for better teaching.

Firstly

, I was on my summer break and I thought the

course

might be fun. After I attended two classes, I discovered the

course

was not only enjoyable but

also

very beneficial for me because I acknowledged so much helpful information about cooking. Since

then

, I started to cook for my family every weekend and I

always

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have the willingness to call my relatives and invite them to come and enjoy my cookery. I now appreciate my mother's cooking very much thanks to your

course

. I would like to suggest a cookery

course

for children during their summer breaks. That would occupy their free time and teach them tips regarding cooking.

This

idea came to me when my younger sister asked me to search for courses for her after she saw how happy I was. I hope you would consider my suggestion. Yours sincerely, Samah

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