The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
two
bar chart provides information on 2012 about the number
of tourists who have enjoyed their time both in Niagara
Falls dan Seattle
. Overall
, the number
of people that visited Niagara
Falls was far bigger than in Seattle
. Summertime seems the best time to spend due to
the high number
of visitors
both in July and August for the two
cities. Meanwhile, both the
cities experienced the lowest Correct article usage
apply
visitors
in January and February.
Clearly, in the first six months, the trend to come into Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
two
cities shows an increasing trend until reached its peak in July and August. Seattle
in its peak season had 2 million
visitors
, while
Niagara
Falls was two
times bigger with 4 million
visitors
. After a growing trend, the drop movement was starting in September. For Seattle
, the city consistently fell from September to December and reached its bottom approximately
0. 2 Change preposition
at approximately
million
people. If Seattle
experienced a drop in December, the lowest number
that visited Niagara
Falls occurred in October and November with 500 thousand tourists while
December jumped up to 2. 5 million
tourists.Submitted by damaspandya on
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