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Countries are becoming mor and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 contemporary world,
people
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 needs and requirements are
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 in day-to-day life.
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, the advent
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 technology has impacted enormously on human lifestyle compared to earlier.
Besides
, nowadays, nations are attempting to become equal ,
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 of that the community
are
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 able to find
the
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particular products
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any destination
in
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 the globe. Even though some of them argued that
this
 technological progress has good sides as well as bad sides for everyone. In
this
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 view
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following
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 paragraphs.
To begin
 with , wherever availability of manufactured items
are
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 becoming common among the local communities . As long as the computer-based science created many beneficial apps which
assisting
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 to do online shopping.
For instance
, a person who wanted to buy things which were not available in their country
,
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 was able to purchase through e-bay, Amazon and so on.
Consequently
, it has assisted with benefits for customers b, where they have a chance to reduce transport expenses and are able to reduce time-wasting.
On the other hand
, as a negative impact low- income earners do not have the capability to face their development facilities. As they attempted to change their lifestyle like other
high status
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 people.
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, a child who belongs to a poor family and who studied with rich students
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 was compelled to get costly and especially, international imported items which are not affordable to
bought
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 by them.
As a result
, they faced social issues in their daily life as well as wherever they are not accepted by others. In conclusion, the whole
our
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 world
are
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 becoming closer to each other. As long as human beings have invented
most
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 precious inventions which help to
development
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 in society. It is clear now, certainly, it ensures good and bad effects
to
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 the human . If we try to choose only necessary factors , we will be able to survive in
this
 world with a healthy lifestyle.
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