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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables compare the
datas
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data
 about the
sales
 of the two items, Fairtrade-labelled coffee and banana, in the year 1999 and 2004 in five
countries
, namely
UK
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the UK
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, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and Sweden.
Overall
, after a five years period,
sales
 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee showed some inclines for all five
countries
.
Although
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Bananas
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Bananas’
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Banana’
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sales
 increased
for
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in
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 some
countries
, there are some losses
of
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in
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 marketing in
few
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a few
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countries
 of fives. With regard to coffee, the UK had the highest growth of income,increasing
18.5
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by 18.5
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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euros, for a 5 years gap
while
 Switzerland doubled coffee’s
sales
 from 3 to 6
millions
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million
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.
Coffee’s
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Coffee
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 demand in Belgium
also
 increased a little more and interestingly, the rise for Denmark and Sweden showed the same gap of
millions
 of euros. For bananas, the most grown market is in Switzerland which is up to 32
millions
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million
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 of rise.
Sales
 in the UK and Belgium jumped about 3 to 4
millions
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million
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.Sadly, Sweden and Denmark’s banana markets fell some points to the digits and the most dropped one is Denmark
which
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whose
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sales
 didn’t reach even 1 million in 2004.
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