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You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for the time of year and the heating / cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter: give details of what went wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take You do NOT need to write your own address.

#hotel #city #weather #time #year #system #manager #action #address
Dear
Mr.
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 Raja, I am writing to
complaint
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 about
poor
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the poor
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 performance of
air
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the air
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 conditioner of your
hotel
. I stayed in
room
 no.103 of
hotel
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the hotel
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 recently and felt very hot inside the
room
. I travelled to Dubai and stayed in your
hotel
last
 month. When I entered
in
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the
room
, it was very warm though AC was ON. I struggled to adjust
temperature
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the temperature
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 and make
room
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the room
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comfertable
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comfortable
 but could not succeed.
At
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 the end, I requested
to
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reception to transfer me
in
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other
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another
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room
 and managed. It is suggested that considering higher
temperature
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 during
pick
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the pick
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 summer season,
entire
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 air conditioner system to be overhauled and calibrated prior to temperature shoot-up.
Moreover
,
periodic
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 checklist to be established to ensure that all the rooms are
comfertable
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comfortable
 prior to check-in of guests. The
hotel
 should consider for exemption of
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additional
addtional
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 charge due to
inconvinience
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inconvenience
 caused. I am looking forward
for
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 your positive response and to
hear
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 suitable actions taken by
hotel
 management. Yours sincerely, Jaivik Darwin
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