Countries are becoming mor and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It is true that
the
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globalization has made the world
as
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a global village and the countries
bacame
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became
more identical than ever before. In the contemporary world, we have easy access to purchase different products whatever where is it which will flourish countries
econonmy
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economy
.
Consequently
, nations started to lose their own
uniquesses
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uniqueness
uniquenesses
and product originality. In the following paragraphs, both views will be discussed in detail.
To begin
with, in the age of development and technology, having or buying
a
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special products which manufacture in
other country
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another country
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far away from us become always
avaliable
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available
.
This
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people to pay their money for it and lead to
increase
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in the general economy.
For example
,
there
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plenty of websites that allow you
buy
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to buy
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something from different lands
such
as Aliexpress and Amazon while you are seating
home
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,
transfering
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transferring
money to other banks
reinforce
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the general economy and
provide
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more job opportunities.
On the other hand
, owning something
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to different cultures can have a negative impact on our identity.
For instance
, Qatar is one of the medal east countries constructed a new place it's called Pearl, the design idea is based on
transfering
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transferring
spain
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decoration to Qatar which
is really looks
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amazing.
Thus
, young people were more
attractive
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to it and the idea started to spread among them which take them a bit away from
thier
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their
unique art and old buildings. In conclusion, in the
modren
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modern
world, getting
an individual outputs
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individual outputs
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no matter where it
constructed
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turns
to
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be
more
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easier which leads to
collapse
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the collapse
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our
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identity.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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