Although most people are richer than the past, modern life seems very stressful, and the number of people suffering from stress is at record levels. What are the main causes of stress in modern life, and how could stress be reduced?

These days people place a premium on making more money and
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a modern
life
. Some people think
this
kind of
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life style
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is a contributing factor to stress, while other argue it has other reasons. In
this
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we want to talk about the root causes and ways that we can reduce
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. To advance other factors, I could deal with responsibilities. Due to the way of
life
these days, we have a lot of things to do. So, there is a lot of pressure on us.
In addition
to what I have just said, on the grounds that we all try to live a better
life
, we need more money and that really has a dire consequence on being
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. It is plain to see
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rich is really hard.
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, we all know Ronaldo. He tried really hard. He had many depths. On top of that, if our
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is not comfortable, it will bother us. There are other factors too.
Although
our
life
is really stress
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full these days, there are ways that we could deal with
this
rough
life
. The
first
thing I should mention is, excursing. It really helps you be calm and it will give you
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energy. Another feature which I should mention is meditation, it’s a new method that helps many of my friends. Going on to the
next
point which is, having a free time for ourselves. Not
last
but not least have
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time to have fun with our parents or our immediate family. To conclude, stress has an ill effect on our
body
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. There are different things that result in
stressfull
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stressful
life
.
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