To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Insects
eating, some people might think
its
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it's
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horrifying or
disgustin
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disgusting
. The truth is, in Asia, where I came from,
insect eating
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insect-eating
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can be as much as an enjoyable and beneficial thing. There are many different
kind
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kinds
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of
insects
, some of them are edible and some are not, even some are
posionous
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poisonous
. For those ones we can eat,
for example
,
scorpion
, a
populor
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popular
kind of
insect
we like to eat,
also
my personal
favorite
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, is a great option to start with. If you've ever been to China, you can notice that there
is
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fried
scorpion
snacks in every food corner. To eat the
scorpion
, of
course
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we
dont
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don't
eat it raw, all you need to do is cut the tail part, where the
scorpion
store
it's
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its
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venom, deep fry it till cooked, sprinkle some salt or other spices,
then
it will be ready to serve. It
taste
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tastes
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like nothing but crunchy chicken to me, very delicious, and full of protein too.
Also
, not just the taste, proved by some medical
researches
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, eating
scorpion
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scorpions
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will
also
help with some
diease
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disease
ideas
. Another kind of
insect
you can see on
dinner
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the dinner
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table
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tables
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in China is
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the locust
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locust
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locusts
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, the recipe
of
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for
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cooking
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the cooking
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a locust
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locust
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locusts
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is basically the same as cooking
scorpion
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a scorpion
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. As you already know,
locust
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locusts
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are peste. They do nothing but harm
on
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our crops, destroying
eveything
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everything
they pass through.
Eathing
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Eating
them is a good way to control or even eliminate
locust
populations. Some people believe that eating
insects
will break the
balence
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balance
between
human
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humans
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and nature. One thing you should know is that the
insects
we are eating now are all
growed
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grown
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in
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on
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the
insect
farm, where the purpose of these
insects
are
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is
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for people to eat, just like pigs or chicken we eat
everyday
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. It does not negatively affect
the
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apply
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nature. In conclusion, I think there are more benefits than drawbacks
on
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in
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the matter of edible
insects
.
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