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Today we can see excessive consumption of natural resources such as air, fresh water, oil, and so on. The usage is increasing at a very dangerous pace and is already reaching critical levels. What are the reasons contributing to this? What should be done to minimize the effects?

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Nowadays, there is a considerable rise in terms of relying on natural
resources
 including air,
fresh water
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, oil etc. Due to the fact that
this
 increasement occurs speedily, it becomes more hazardous day by day. I would like to mention some of its causes and possible solutions to prevent it.
To begin
 with, causes of hyper use of natural
resources
, overpopulation can be considered
as
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top
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 of it. The population is growing substantially and the more crowded the population are, the more unnecessary consumption they make.
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 amount of people
is
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 relying on oil
so as
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to fuel their private cars every single day. As well as wasting
fresh water
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 is another trend problem that
on
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the rise
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rise
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 since people spend extended time in the shower. Another thing is,
society
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 is not exactly conscious, indeed they
are not really care
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do not really care
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 about the waste
nor
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or
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 the importance of natural
resources
.
For instance
, in my country, there
are
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number
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a number
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 of people
not
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who not
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 only take shower for hours but
also
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see
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 it as a problem. When it comes to the solutions,
government
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 is capable of
decrease
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 the waste
with
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by
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 putting some restrictions
to
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 the amount of using these
resources
 per head.
Besides
 that, reinforcements are
also
 needed. To clarify, in a country I read about before,
government
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 gives free tokens used for supermarket
discount
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 to one who used up
least
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the least
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 water
on
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 that month.
Additionally
,
government
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 must raise public awareness
by
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 education programs free of charge to encourage them to be more cautious in regard to
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the use
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use
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using
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natural
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of natural
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resources
. All in all, humanity is
in
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a
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risk
for
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of
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 facing
consequences
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 of using
resources
 much more than necessary. So
that
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,
government
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the government
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 should take an action to prevent these possible detrimental consequences as soon as possible.
Otherwise
, future generations are
waited
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 by a troublesome world.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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