Today we can see excessive consumption of natural resources such as air, fresh water, oil, and so on. The usage is increasing at a very dangerous pace and is already reaching critical levels. What are the reasons contributing to this? What should be done to minimize the effects?

Nowadays, there is a considerable rise in terms of relying on natural
resources
including air,
fresh water
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, oil etc. Due to the fact that
this
increasement occurs speedily, it becomes more hazardous day by day. I would like to mention some of its causes and possible solutions to prevent it.
To begin
with, causes of hyper use of natural
resources
, overpopulation can be considered
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top
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of it. The population is growing substantially and the more crowded the population are, the more unnecessary consumption they make.
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amount of people
is
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relying on oil
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to fuel their private cars every single day. As well as wasting
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is another trend problem that
on
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the rise
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rise
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since people spend extended time in the shower. Another thing is,
society
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is not exactly conscious, indeed they
are not really care
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about the waste
nor
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the importance of natural
resources
.
For instance
, in my country, there
are
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number
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of people
not
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only take shower for hours but
also
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see
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it as a problem. When it comes to the solutions,
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is capable of
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the waste
with
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putting some restrictions
to
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the amount of using these
resources
per head.
Besides
that, reinforcements are
also
needed. To clarify, in a country I read about before,
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gives free tokens used for supermarket
discount
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to one who used up
least
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water
on
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that month.
Additionally
,
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must raise public awareness
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education programs free of charge to encourage them to be more cautious in regard to
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natural
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resources
. All in all, humanity is
in
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a
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risk
for
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facing
consequences
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of using
resources
much more than necessary. So
that
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,
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should take an action to prevent these possible detrimental consequences as soon as possible.
Otherwise
, future generations are
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by a troublesome world.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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