People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

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These days, the amount of advertisements that people see is growing. And it is believed that commercials have

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impact on us. I do admit

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negative effects, but the positive effects are truly more.

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the most advertising platform is the social network called Instagram,

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popular

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bloggers tout things or other people daily and thousands and even millions can see them. Because

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individuals mostly follow bloggers whom there are interested in,

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most

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ads

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the ads

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are useful for them. The app automatically pushes and shows posts of things depending on

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history of researches or other posts

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likes, thanks to that everyone can find an item they were looking for without wasting a lot of energy.

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quarantee

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that every commercial is useful for individuals. There can be a promotion of not good item,

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people being interested can go buying that and will waste of their money.

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and they can even not

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try its service,

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can face

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bad service and make their health worse. In conclusion, individuals cannot run from commercials, they will face

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them even though

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bad or good. Mostly they benefit from it, but there can be situations when advertisements

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negative effect.

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People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

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Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Do you agree or disagree? Use at least one personal example in your response.

Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?

the production of olive oil. do you agree with this statement?

the charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.