Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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technology has enabled some of the

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and education system to scale back and

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an off campus system.

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presenting some negative side effects I believe it to be a positive change. In terms of positive

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, one of the main advantages of working or studying from home is the affordability as the

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could be utilized for the advancement of the place or respent on workers or students increasing motivation and loyalty .

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the money could be

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on holiday gifts or company events.

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work

or school decreases transit time making the day more

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productive

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to drive an hour to and back he's

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more time and energy could be put back

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low

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productivity

.when students go to school they are

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conducive

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for studying and concentrating

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that can't be replicated

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easily

(easily) (the same sentiment applies in the case of working).

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it is easy to not listen or commit when at home away from the right

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environment

needed for

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studying

). Another negative

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aspect

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decrease

in socializing.For Humans as a social animal

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are the main

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for it) so does the mental well being

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skills are still developing.

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kids are lacking in social skills later in life. In

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producativty

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and social skills I believe them to be minor

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when compared to the advantages

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in the monetary

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and the life of the worker.

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