The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries.
The three pie charts compare the level of danger of wasted items in
countries
(the Republic of Korea, Sweden and United
Kingdom)
Correct article usage
the United
Overall
, it can be seen clearly that the least dangerous waste in both countries
was "chemical treatment" and "dumping at sea".
Concerning the
Republic of Korea, Change preposition
The
it
showed the highest data Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
recycling garbage with 69%, which is the highest proportion among other Change preposition
for
countries
. The next
sphere which is dealt with by Korea is underground which make
up 22%. Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
Finally
, the least hazardous waste was incineration accounted
for 9%. On the opposite side, Sweden showed different indexes. Underground was the most warning problem with 55%. Recycling and incineration, have similar percentages which make up 25% and 20% respectively. Concluding, the United Kingdom, shows that the underground is the most dealing with Wrong verb form
accounting
this
issue, 82%. Meanwhile, another two wasted products are by chemical treatment and dumping at sea, which has the same proportions, with 8% both. Incineration shows the lowest percentage accounted for 2% of overall
countries
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