Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today's media highlights the major natural disaster issue, "Animal extinct". Some communities argue that countries and individuals should prevent
this
animal extinct symptom.
However
, many
crowd
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don't believe that support endangered
animals
. because they claim dying
animals
are caused by not only artificial
reasons
but
also
natural
reasons
. In
this
essay, I am going to illustrate both sides.
To begin
, people argue the idea of protecting wild
animals
for moral
reasons
. In early human civilization, people used to hunt
animals
to survive hunger and cold. But as centuries gose by, hunting
animals
became an unnecessary activity to maintain our lives.
However
, agreed for fame and selfishness couldn't stop a hunting activity.
For example
, an African elephant is in danger of extinct by vicious outlaw hunting from poachers. The wild elephant's fangs are so rare and expensive that people are willing to pay them even it is illegal. In fact, Not only African elephants, numerous
animals
got hunted for a temporary luxurious action.
Thus
unless hunting behaviour tackled morality, many associations attempt to protect
animals
for these
reasons
.
Therefore
, some animal experts assume that animal extinct occurs in a cycle of nature.
For example
, Cheeta is well known for being the most endangered animal in Africa.
Although
they are the top rank in a cycle of nature, their survival and birth rate is relatively low. ,
Also
Cheeta has a sensitive and introverted personality, that sometimes their poor mental condition interrupt mating and hunting activities. According to the research, cheeta cups' survival rates are only 20% in general.
In other words
, "Animal extinct" could occur without human effects. Not only natural causes, but the maintenance to protecting
animals
also
maintenance to protecting
animals
costs too high to control by independent individuals or communities. In sum, many folks have an argument over protecting endangered
animals
by countries and individuals. on the disagreement side, they argue that the symptom of dying
animals
cannot be controlled by human action, because it is a cycle of nature.
However
, I believe the responsibility of killing
animals
for selfishness, cannot be erased, In my opinion, to postpone an animal instinct, all endangered
animals
should have more protection and support in the communities and countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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