Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of the most people's lives. Other think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility.

Many
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believe that the adolescent periods are the
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pink times of
the
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most
people
's lives. Other humans claim that
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grown
person
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life takes more gladness, despite
of
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big duty.
To begin
with, some
people
think that adult life brings more happiness, regardless of huge responsibility. There are a lot of opportunities if
people
become
adult
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,
for instance
, being independent,
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around the world and
also
have own car or wealth. Many
people
wait
this
period
of
time
due to it is enjoyable and the best
time
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for instance
they work
own
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job, they can provide themselves and
also
they find significant other.
On the other hand
, they have
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duty,
it
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has difficulties for them.
As a result
, most
people
prefer to live
this
time
because they enjoy amazing
moments
and unforgettable
moments
. On the other side,
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most
people
believe that
teenage
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years are the best times of
the
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most
people
's lives. In
this
period
there are many happiest
moments
,
for instance
, playing football and other activities,
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as like children, loving someone and
also
stressful
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.
The most
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adolescent
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feel strange and depressed because they think that I have a lot of problems and
i
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fed
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up
to
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everything. They have difficulties from study and loving topics. They
tent
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to die themselves, it is very funny to older
people
.
The most
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people
long to live in
this
period
because it is so memorable and exciting. To sum up, I totally
agree
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this
point which is teenage years due to
have
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many unforgettable
moments
and feelings. At
this
moment I am
adolescent
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an adolescent
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and
i
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I
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enjoy
this
period
of
time
.
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