Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Even though there is a popular agreement that
television
advertising directed towards young
children
aged
two
to
five
should be allowed to keep them entertained, I have a different opinion. I totally disagree with
this
. I feel
this
way for
two
reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin
with, it is critically important to inhibit the
children
age
two
to
five
watching
television
advertising because the
kids
cannot distingue if the advertisements are exaggerated which can lead to accidents. Some advertisements only want to sell their products without thinking about safety. My personal experience is a compelling example of
this
. About 10 years ago, my relative wanted to buy a spiderman outfit because he thought he would jump like a spiderman and when he got the outfit, in the beginning, he started jumping on the table. Unfortunately, one day he jumped from upstairs to downstairs.
Moreover
,
this
made him got an accident by breaking his legs. He needed to stay in a hospital for almost a month and missed school. I am sure if his parent had not let him watch
television
advertising,
this
situation would not have happened.
Therefore
, avoiding
children
aged
two
to
five
watching
television
is greater than watching because
kids
do not know what is the reality of just the performance. Another obvious reason is that some families have a financial problem that they are not able to afford toys because toys are expensive to be safe for the
kids
, so they always produce with good material.
For instance
, One of my friends,
she
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show examples
has 2
kids
. She always let her
kids
watch
television
. She kept telling me that when the big sister wanted the doll toy, the little boy wanted the car toy
also
because they are jealous.
This
made my friend is exhausted because she is a stayed home mom ,so her husband is the only one who earns money.
Furthermore
, I gave her some advice that tried not to let the
kids
watch
television
because
television
influences the
kids
that they are not able to distingue.
As a result
, letting the
kids
watch
television
will make a financial become unstable. In conclusion, for all the reasons stated above, I encourage all parents should not be allowed
children
aged
two
to
five
to watch
television
advertising. If they do
this
,
then
they will discover for themselves that avoiding the
television
will have a countless number of reducing a financial problem and a medical emergency situation.
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