Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as learning tool, which is why children are less educated today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays,
children
dedicated
big
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a big
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amount of
time
to watching
TV
programs, cartoons or movies
insted
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instead
of studying their subjects. As a consequence,
children
gained much less knowledge than
elder
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the elder
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generation, who had grown without
television
. I agree with
this
statement to some extent In
era
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of modernisation and
invention
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almost every household consist
one
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of one
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or more
television
.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,
persom
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person
persons
who are born in 2000nds can watch
TV
from infancy to adulthood what can lead huge
drowbacks
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drawbacks
such
as addiction from
TV
programmes and
unwillingnes
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unwillingness
willingness
to study.
Additionally
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it can create
a
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problems related
with
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socialisation, which
also
influnce
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influence
influenced
to
studying
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the studying
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process. It is well-known fact that
TV
is not able to alter books, which
considered
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is considered
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a tons
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a ton
tons
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of knowledge, which should be gained by pupils during their studying process. Lack of
abilities
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ability
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to study
good
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in school is wasting
time
at home. It means that parents
also
have responsibilities to
children
's habits.
However
, spending much
time
in front of
television
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the television
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not
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is not
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only about disadvantages and distractors to study. It is the fact that
,
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television
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the television
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industry published scientific programmes, related
with
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to
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main subjects in schools, that improve their outlook. In case parents keep an eye
after
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on
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their own child they would choose appropriate
TV
shows. To conclude, despite the huge problems caused in
children
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children's
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school life by wasting
time
in front of
television
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the television
a television
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, parents can change its
influnce
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influence
to
children
by choosing suitable shows, forcing a sense of
interesting
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interest
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.
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